Hope this helps...
You put this in as an "Unfinished" track, so I am going to write this review with the mentality that pretty much everything about this song is "up in the air", and still being designed and constructed.
The melodies are beautiful, and well constructed. They all fit together seamlessly, and I can find no out-of-place note in the entire track. It’s awesome quite frankly. Toward the end when you have what sounds like a thousand synth lines, it just explodes into the greatest place.
However, the single synth line in the beginning goes on too long before the second synth line comes in. When the second synth line comes in, the 2 synth lines goes on too long before another change happens. Basically things are ringing out for too long without really changing. This doesn't hold my interest very well.
I know a lot of techno is this way, and that you basically are doing the same thing that every other techno artist does by having everything ring out for a ridiculous amount of time, I would suggest you make yourself stand out from the crowd and have things move at a faster pace.
Add some nice changing quarter-beat and sixteenth-beat hats, a 4-on-the-floor-kick, and I can very easily hear an awesome little commercial quality club-worthy dance track.
Finish it. I defiantly hear real potential.